Jorge's essay

Hey guys

Today I read Jorge's essay which was a really good example of the type of essay I would like you to write.
If you are finding the essay difficult, read Jorge's for some idea..... (Don't actually copy it though!)

• Describe the political situation in your country:

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Essay : by Jorge Galvez

Introduction

In Mexico the people have a lot of freedom to say what they do not like about the politicians, but the politicians do not care about it. “Now it is a really bad situation in Mexico, but nobody does anything.”

Body Paragraph #1:

Last year almost twenty thousand people died because of the organized crime. Some of the most important cities in Mexico became dangerous, many people have to leave their cities. In these kind of cities all the people are afraid to go out of home because you never know what can happen when you are in a public place. Last month five men went inside a casino and burned it 50 people died. This is because now the organized crime order you to pay money for any company or establishment you have. The police never do anything, they always came after the crime is done.

Body Paragraph #2:

Mexico has a very bad mode of judgement, actually last year a movie came out and the government try to censure it because in the movie you can see every detail of the mode of sentence we have. Many innocent people go to jail, without culpability. After this movie they change the mode of judgement they record all the process. If you do a crime sometimes you can pay money and they let you free, you can see this everywhere. The sentence they give sometimes is tough but we do not have death penalty. This situation is because the government does not care about the people in charge of important jobs, there are many people without  capacity to do their jobs.

Body Paragraph #3:

The violence is growing every year many young people are joining the organized crime, this is because they are not opportunities to work. The violence in Mexico is giving a really bad reputation around the world and this is responsibility of the government because they never do anything, they wait for things to happen to react. The corruption is too much you can not even trust the police because they are involved with the  organized crime. They have to clean all the posts in the government I know it is almost impossible and if the people do not help, the government can not do everything.

Conclusion:

Mexico is living the worst time you can   not  live in peace because of the violence,many people are immigrating to other places to live in calm. Many students are leaving some of the most important universities in Mexico just because of the violence. All this situation is affecting the economy of the country and it is not fair for this beautiful country and the nice people who live in it. Hopefully some day the politicians and the people can change to fix this awesome country.